I would have liked more frames per second, but it was still very entertaining to watch. I strongly approve of the music choice, and there's pretty much only one thing I really didn't like. Why did the girl have to have such ugly, oddly-shaped breasts?
I don't know who the singer is, but while I congratulate him on staying in tune (which is more than could be said for most singers today), he was completely unintelligible. I could only understand the last word of some of the lines. He really ought to learn how to sing clearly.
I believe I may have approached this with the wrong mindset, but I didn't find this piece engaging at all. My thoughts during the video were more or less, "Oh, this guy's singing; is this some kind of music video? Why did he jump off the cliff? Why are the birds suiciding against the cliff wall? Huh, a bird got his ring- oh, wait, that bird killed itself too. Hm." The shot-by-shot descriptions really explained a lot, though, and I can't thank you enough for including them. On the downside, (again, maybe I was in the completely wrong mindset) none of the details in the descriptions were conveyed at all, at least to me. You seem proud of your work, though, so good on you for that.
Overall, though, this video was uninteresting and borderline pretentious.
A neat idea, but poor execution
The animation quality was poor and overly simplistic. I know that you're not going for detailed visuals, but the animation doesn't show the subtle detail that simplified animations have. Also, I understand the message you're trying to convey, but you're going about it so directly that it's... boring, honestly.
What just happened?
Aside from the leading chick, there were no consistent characters that I could find. Nameless important-looking figures appeared for short segments, and the plot was completely impossible to follow.
The quality of the animation with her arms and boobs is a lot higher quality than the animation elsewhere; it's almost as if you traced individual frames from a porn clip. You get a tentative six, as I can't tell either way whether or not you drew this yourself or traced frames from porn. They way her hands move, especially going up her chest above her breasts, have me leaning towards tracing.
Meh, kind of okay
The artistry and animation was pretty wretched. It looked thrown together, like not too much work was put into it. The voicework was okay, but the singing needed some work. For a lot of the song, it seemed like she was just speaking in rhythm with a vague sense of pitch rather than actually singing. I'm not sure if that's the way the song was done, but it seems improper. Also, when the tone went up, it didn't sound like the VA had much vocal training. She might have, I dunno. I think if just a little more effort was put into this, instead of making it so incredibly random and trying to get by on the oh-my-God-breaking-out-into-song factor, it could have been a really great animation.
Not my style, I guess.
I couldn't understand any of the words anyone was saying until some bits towards the end. Because of that, it wasn't really good for me. I'm also not fond of the poetry-esque style. However, I liked some bits of the visual style, and I can tell it had a good message somewhere in there.
It's not really nudity if it's all censored.
Honestly, the dirtiest part of that whole thing was Toad's cock. I was expecting some real sex scene, like at the end of one of those Metal Gear collabs. Oh well.
Might have been good
The sound effects were insanely loud, while the voices were insanely quiet. I couldn't turn the volume up, as that would kill my ears the second anything made any noise; and I couldn't turn the speakers down, as then I could barely hear any voices. Adding in the weird accent and pronunciation, and you get a flash that I couldn't even understand. The only reason you're even getting a 6 is because I can tell that a lot of work went into this flash. I could tell that there WAS a story or something, and there was a fair amount of quality in the animation. However, the erratic and painful sound volume gets you -4.
My advice is to go with everything Battosai810 said.
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